magazine reflection

1. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what improved? How did it get better? Why? My intro have change a lot by being critique. For example this the first daft I did "This semester I am working as an intern at Maritime Museum of San Diego under Kevin Sheehan. Sheehan is the manager of the Museum, which is the only museum in San Diego that is onboard a ship." By getting my interview critique by class my interview change to this “Eighteenth century warships and Russian submarines are unlikely surroundings for an office space, but for Kevin Sheehan, manager of the San Diego Maritime Museum, it is the norm.” The final introduction is better that the first draft because it grabs the readers attention and it has details about the ships at the museum.

2. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why? I need help on coming up with ideas and Spelling. I notice that I don’t have trouble talking about my ideas but I find it difficult to write them down because spelling gets in the way.

3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc. For example this the first daft I did "This semester I am working as an intern at Maritime Museum of San Diego under Kevin Sheehan. Sheehan is the manager of the Museum, which is the only museum in San Diego that is onboard a ship." By getting my interview critique by class my interview change to this “Eighteenth century warships and Russian submarines are unlikely surroundings for an office space, but for Kevin Sheehan, manager of the San Diego Maritime Museum, it is the norm.” The final introduction is better that the first draft because it grabs the readers attention and it has details about the ships at the museum.

4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.
I learn that I can come up with some ideas to make an article but also learn that can spelling can get in the way. For this project I learn about how to write for an audience.